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Saturday, January 12, 2008

Vidarbha......

Wilted plants in the cracked ground,
With showers refusing to come around,
A countless lives gone without a sound,
Tears and blood wet the barren ground.

Under the tin-roof the heaving breasts,
Crying over the children's wrecks,
Hitting the stolid earth with tightened fists,
As the virgins they slash their wrists.

Warring life itself for the daily bread,
It's harder done than earlier said,
And the lines on the palm the astrologer read,
Long erased in the wretched graves......

3 comments:

Trinath Gaduparthi said...

Except the first stanza where you rhymed repeatedly , the rest 3 stanzas are very very well written.

Ashok Subramanian P said...

Thanks man...... I thought those rhymed pretty well, now that u think otherwise, I'll try to write something better....

Trinath Gaduparthi said...

Hey Ashok!!!
It is not necessary to rhyme always. Sometimes it adds to the beauty but sometimes it forces it not to surface. So be wary of the situation where the rhyme disturbs the strength of the original idea.